Patience

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placid oceans
ghastly winds
currents strong
inanimate waters
earthquakes shake
stillness still
rumbling within
magma flows
will break through
await the prey
moments speak
hard to catch
Gaea whispers
try to hear
still you sit
learn you must
it comes to you
placid oceans
await the prey
its course will show

FNM

48 responses to “Patience”

  1. lot of craziness int eh world today….shaking….ash clouds…i wonder what she is trying to tell us…and if we will listen…

    1. I’m happy someone commented one of my poems and I hope people do listen 🙂 The internet is a great way to try and reach out. Hopefully from your comment others will come and read and listen. Have a wonderful day!

  2. lovely piece,
    I like the color of purple…

    you have a fun way with words.

  3. awesome poem there.. loved it very much..
    apt usage of words… loved the purply background too 😀

    im here from Jingle’s rally
    you can check my poem at

    Thursday Poets Rally ~Muddled Mind…!!

    1. Thanks :)! It will be my pleasure to read your poems, thanks for the link.

  4. moondustwriter Avatar
    moondustwriter

    Interesting take on patience. Nicely done

    get a chance visit another luna

    moondustwriter.com

    1. I’ll be more than happy to visit your page moondustwriter 🙂 and thanks for the comment!

  5. This is great! I was hooked, lined and sunk 🙂

    1. Thank you JStar :)! It always makes me happy to know my work is interesting and appreciated. I already went to your website and I have to compliment you as well. What you wrote with taste in your mind was very meaningful and true of life. I hope to keep reading, but I can’t find the subscribe button…can you help?

  6. great writing seriously!

    1. I’m so ecstatic at all the pleasant feedback 🙂 Thank you so much Fiveloaf. I’m happy you liked it and I have to say that you’re work is also very nice. I just read “outrun” and “sick audience”, very interesting. I love the style and the message definitely sparks the mind. I hope we can continue following each other.

  7. This piece is just precise and well-worded…all you need to do is keep writing….

    Have a look at my BLOG loaded with lovely emotional poems;

    http://ediomoudofia.blogspot.com/

    1. I will take a look at your blog 🙂 As soon as I’m done thanking you for the appreciative comments on my poem :)!

  8. Yay Luna! What an AMAZING poem!! I love your originality!!

    1. Very happy to hear you enjoyed it! Thanks 🙂

  9. Very nice. I always love such impressionistic writing. I look forward to reading more of your work.

    1. Thank you blankwall! I look forward to reading more of yours too, I subscribed to your page a bit ago. Have a great day!

  10. shoelessboywonder Avatar
    shoelessboywonder

    First off great work, and secondly welcome to the rally 🙂 hope to read more of your work soon in up coming rallys

    1. I’m glad you liked what I wrote Shoelessboywonder and thanks for the rally welcome :). I look forward to keeping up with what you have to share with us too ;)!

  11. thank you for joining us,
    have fun!
    😉

    let me know if you have further questions.

    1. Thank you Ji, for everything :). I’m happy to be a part of the group! And if I have any questions I will let you know. Have a great evening :).

  12. I love the way you place these vivid ever strong images on a purple background. And amongsth those powerful images the most powerful verse is simple “moments speak” …truly awesome.

    1. Thank you so much Suzicate :). To hear that my work is appreciated and liked has made my day a great one. I’m sure you get the same feeling when that happens. I look forward to sharing deep and meaningful writing with you and all the great writers that have shown an interest here today. I think we can all help each other become better writers and people. I hope you are having a great evening ;)!

  13. Very nice poem I really like the way you build this poem. Great job! 🙂
    http://karadouglas.wordpress.com

    1. Thank you Kara 🙂 I can’t wait to check out your writing too! I’m sure it will be beautiful like your daisy picture…daisies make me think of joy and friendship.

  14. i like how you used little words to express a lot of meaning 🙂 wonderful work.. 😀 well done

    1. Thank you Oinky 🙂 I’m happy to know that.

  15. This is just lovely or this there a word better than that?…Cheers!

    1. Thanks Emmauel; you are very kind :)!

  16. Well done.
    Very honest and lovely words.
    I really enjoyed that.
    Happy Thursday!
    Mine is here
    hugs
    shakira

    1. Thanks Shakira 🙂 I’m going to go check out your link as soon as I’m done answering you. I hope you are having a lovely morning!

  17. …and learn we shal!! 🙂

    1. I truly hope so moondai 🙂

  18. Nature has so much going on within herself …
    beautifully worded 🙂 well written…

    1. Thank you Rijlakshmi :). It’s good to hear that my efforts bring about good results. I enjoyed your work as well, I believe I left you a comment yesterday ;). Have a fantastic day!

  19. I loved savoring this one, each lline a short story to stop and ponder over!

    Excellent!!

    1. Thank you very much Jannie Funster :)! I look forward to reading your work as well and sharing ideas.

    1. Thanks trisha :)! You have some great poems as well and I love the graphic design.

  20. terse and descriptive at once– good job!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

    1. 🙂 Thank you Mairmusic. I try, my best.

  21. a great use and association of words.well done

    1. Thank you wordwand and good morning :)! Happy to hear you enjoyed it.

  22. Thank you BFG! Jingles gave them to the winners for the Thursday Poets’ Rally week 15 🙂

    Here’s the link in case you wanted to check it out:

    Thursday Poets Rally Week 15 (April 22-28, 2010)

    🙂 Have a nice day!!

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